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This was my last paragraph. I did it with Paulina and she knows how to write. I wrote a lot of things. She helped me and I gave her my opinions and while we were doing the outline, we did the entire paragraph so I felt really fulfilled to finish it earlier.

When the teacher gave us the first draft with the corrections... I was a little bit disapointed because it was a low grade but I realized that our paragraph had several mistakes and with no cohesion but we tried to fix it and I think that now is much better to understand with the connectors (I forgot to use them...I don't know why). Also our paragraph was too long and we had to cut it :( it was hard but I hope that our paragraph will be much better. The feedback that Camila and Jorge gave us was helpful to realized some mistakes and different colloquial words. 

I hope to have a better grade this time.

I had fun with the last paragraph <3 

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I enjoyed writing my third paragraph because I feel that I knew a little bit more about how to write. I like when my classmates give me feedback because I know what my mistakes are and I can correct them. I didn't have much difference between my first draft and my second draft but again... I'm learning and I enjoy doing it :D . 
 I choose "Divorce" because is one of the things that I don't like in life. But it is neccesary to know about the causes of it so I can learn more about this theme. 
I liked to write this type of paragraph "Cause and Effect" and it was one of my favourite types of paragraph and easy to write... Well I like to write everything in order, everything with the connectors and everything right.
(Actually I learned that in this course). 
  

Second Paragraph

I wrote this second paragraph with Mirtha. We are friends and we know each other, so it was easy to us.

When I have to write paragraphs with another person it is difficult for me. I have many ideas in my mind but it's difficult for me to write them down, as a result of that, my partner was who used to write.

In this course (paragraph) I'm learning many things like how to organize my ideas, to use connectors, etc., and I'm very impressed that in this opportunity I could contribute not only with the ideas but with writing. I’m impressed how I could say something related to the writing thing. I know that this doesn’t mean that now I know everything about writing. I’m happy because I feel that this is a process and it’s working with me, I mean, really small steps (hahaha) but I’m moving forward.

First Paragraph

When I first started with my outline it was a mess and obviously it was a mess too when I wrote my first draft of the paragraph.When my classmate did the peer edited it was great because I could realize my mistakes and I tried to correct them, finally I did an effort and I tried to complete, to correct my mistakes and I felf realized when I saw my final paragraph. The ideas were more organized and I complemented my theme. I hope to have a good mark, not a great expectacular one but a good mark. I know that I am not a perfect writer but I'm trying to do my best. 

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